25 Story Comments and Analysis

Maggie- Nice story, I like how you were very specific in your description of this cool person. Because this story is about a new girl who everyone is curious about because she is mysterious and different.

Esther- I like your story, I reminded me of you a lot. The character has a very calm attitude like he doesn't really care, he's just chill.

Omar- I liked the setting you chose, for the characters to be at a concert, that was pretty cool. And I like how you portrayed the protagonist as the nice guy, the medeator, mending a relationship between two of his friends.

Jacara- Your story seemed to be of an average girl and I like how in the end you show that she says what she feels to the man with the large bag, as you said in your title, she doesn't like to make a big deal out of it but she expresses her thoughts freely.

Kate- Your story is the popular girl who is hiding from herself and this is where she reveals who she wants to be and she is still pretty cool. She has a revalation and it is within a small amount of time, good job.

I noticed some patterns in these stories. In mine and Maggie's there is something mysterious about the character, you want to know more about them because there is something different about them. But, once you know more about the person, they are not as cool or interesting anymore. This is not shown in the stories specifically but in my own personal experiences, this is what I notice.

I also noticed that most of these characters are very confident, they know what they want and they are not afraid to be themselves. Specifically in Jacara's, the character in her story was not afraid to say what she felt. Also in Esther's story, the protagonist knew what he wanted to wear and did what he felt without much second thought.

Another recurring aspect of cool that I saw in these stories, is the person is generally a nice person. In my story, the protagonist helped the girl pick up papers, In Kate's story, her character defended another student, and in Omar's blog, he mediated a situation between his two friends. All showing that the "cool" person cares to some extent which sort of contradicts the whole idea of indifference is cool. They are different types of cool but is it cool to be both indifferent and nice?

Finally, another pattern I noticed was that the majority of the stories took place in school. That is generally where most people look for acceptance of being "cool" or that is where the person's "followers" take place. School is the where we see the same people every day and when there is something mysterious about someone in school (Maggie's) it sparks something and all of the sudden everyone is interested. School is also where we grow and develop our self esteem to then practice our confidence in front of an audience. It is also the place where we interact with people. It is the main common place for teenagers to fit people into achetypes.